Commentary
Dear Brandon,
We would like to take this opportunity to tell you a few things that we have observed over these past
years regarding your creative writing as well as your analytical writing. We recall some of your middle school
papers, and in most of those, while the reader could understand the ideas or
concepts you were trying to express, often it was a labor to fully grasp the
meanings of some of your sentences.
Often, there were incomplete thoughts, run on sentences, and your idea
structures were often vague and not fully developed.
As the years have gone by, we have seen your writing grow, just as you
have. This year, when we read a
paper you have written, the sentences are complete, the ideas are more well
thought out, the flow of your papers seem to be more natural which allows the
reader to digest the thoughts you are expressing instead of having to try to
determine what was your true meaning.
It makes the process of reading more enjoyable.
One of the biggest areas of growth in your writing has been in your
creative writing assignments. You
have become extremely descriptive as a whole. When you introduce either an item or a
character, you choose your words wisely in an effort to best elaborate or paint
the picture of the person almost to the point where it is easy to visualize your
meaning. It is certainly a trait of
any successful writer and one you have worked hard to develop.
We recall a paper you wrote early in your senior year where you were “a
pair of sneakers.” In this paper,
you attempted to explain how you were not just another ordinary pair, like every
other sneaker out there, but you went into great detail to talk about the little
characteristics of yourself, as a sneaker, the eyelets, the soles, the inner
supports, etc. and your analogies
were very creative. As we
understood that assignment, you had to take a make yourself any inanimate object
and describe yourself. Knowing
your pension for shoes, it was very enjoyable to read how you were not just any
sneaker out there, you were one that was chosen by someone who was striving for
greatness, one who would be chosen only by an individual who sought to be above
average, just as you do in life.
Those types of analogies and writing techniques are a sign of a much more
mature writer and it has been such a pleasure reading your work over the
years.
Sincerely,
Doug Dunn and Mom
We would like to take this opportunity to tell you a few things that we have observed over these past
years regarding your creative writing as well as your analytical writing. We recall some of your middle school
papers, and in most of those, while the reader could understand the ideas or
concepts you were trying to express, often it was a labor to fully grasp the
meanings of some of your sentences.
Often, there were incomplete thoughts, run on sentences, and your idea
structures were often vague and not fully developed.
As the years have gone by, we have seen your writing grow, just as you
have. This year, when we read a
paper you have written, the sentences are complete, the ideas are more well
thought out, the flow of your papers seem to be more natural which allows the
reader to digest the thoughts you are expressing instead of having to try to
determine what was your true meaning.
It makes the process of reading more enjoyable.
One of the biggest areas of growth in your writing has been in your
creative writing assignments. You
have become extremely descriptive as a whole. When you introduce either an item or a
character, you choose your words wisely in an effort to best elaborate or paint
the picture of the person almost to the point where it is easy to visualize your
meaning. It is certainly a trait of
any successful writer and one you have worked hard to develop.
We recall a paper you wrote early in your senior year where you were “a
pair of sneakers.” In this paper,
you attempted to explain how you were not just another ordinary pair, like every
other sneaker out there, but you went into great detail to talk about the little
characteristics of yourself, as a sneaker, the eyelets, the soles, the inner
supports, etc. and your analogies
were very creative. As we
understood that assignment, you had to take a make yourself any inanimate object
and describe yourself. Knowing
your pension for shoes, it was very enjoyable to read how you were not just any
sneaker out there, you were one that was chosen by someone who was striving for
greatness, one who would be chosen only by an individual who sought to be above
average, just as you do in life.
Those types of analogies and writing techniques are a sign of a much more
mature writer and it has been such a pleasure reading your work over the
years.
Sincerely,
Doug Dunn and Mom